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Fly away

Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 8:56 pm
by shygirl78
She sits at her desk and works, another minute passes by. The computer screen stares back, the same as the day before, devoid of all emotion. The soundtrack of the 9-5 fills the air, deadlines and mindless chatter, another day lost forever, in exchange for money. Her fingers engage the cold keyboard, but, her mind has flown so far away. To freedom, to expression and beauty. To a working life undictated.

Re: Fly away

Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 2:36 am
by Peter Connelly
That's so emotive, M... excellent ! Love it

Got lots more feedback re. your other posts, which I'll do over the week. Ta again. Nice one.

Re: Fly away

Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 2:40 am
by Peter Connelly
'To a working life undictated'.

Just thought about that a wee bit more.

Brilliant.

Re: Fly away

Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 6:39 am
by shygirl78
Thanks P :-D. Was quite pleased, as I haven't really tried writing anything since my school days, was just amusing myself last night and guess this wee arts forum has been some inspiration too.

Re: Fly away

Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 10:19 am
by shygirl78
PS: I wouldn't usually write a poem all bunched up like that.

Was typing from my mobile as I am still 'laptopless' and what I thought was happening on the phone screen didn't quite transfer to to the forum screen as I'd thought it would!